Today I did this exercise with Cuong. He mixed up very quickly without any mistakes. It can be regarded that he is so smart that he can mix up my paragraph in the right order. Anther reason is that my paragraph is clear and simple to understand. However, I can't mix up his paragraph in the right order. One reason is that his paragraph is so complicate that I can't find out the logic. Another reason is that I don't know some vocabulary which impact my understanding of his paragraph.
What do I have to do after this exercise? I have recognized that Cuong analyses the problem in many aspects which will make the whole topic more interesting. What's more, he has used some academic vocabularies which make the paragraph looks more academic. What I have to do now is to check my whole essay again to use more academic words and phrases. What's more, add some examples to support my argument. Furthermore, check my essay is well-organised and all parts are relevant to the question.
Here is my paragraph:
1. As we know, globalisation has spread its power all over the world. It is proved that globalisation has a significant impact on the economy which enhances the wealth from finance, investment, as well as trade.
2. Some economists argue that the emergence of fast rising and transformed foreign direct investment (FDI) have contributed both developed and developing countries to double-digit economic growth (Sassen, 2000).
3. Multinational corporations have played an important role in these global investments. The World Trade Organisation (WTO) has proclaimed that there is “a dramatic and continues growth of world trade”, which relatives to the growth in global output by multinational corporations in the economic activity (David, 2000).
4. What’s more, with the emergence of the formation of a global economy, new productivity sources, as well as new organizational forms, new information and communication technologies are forced to be created and spread as “the roots of globalisation development” (Manuel, 1998).
5. Furthermore, global ideas and information are spreading through the world, promoting global understanding and tolerance, stimulating the world to enter into a "global culture" (Aharoni, 2008).
6. The culture of globalization pervades our steps to life following simultaneous communication, ideas, information as well as languages through Internet, television, trade and tourism in the process.
What do I have to do after this exercise? I have recognized that Cuong analyses the problem in many aspects which will make the whole topic more interesting. What's more, he has used some academic vocabularies which make the paragraph looks more academic. What I have to do now is to check my whole essay again to use more academic words and phrases. What's more, add some examples to support my argument. Furthermore, check my essay is well-organised and all parts are relevant to the question.
Here is my paragraph:
1. As we know, globalisation has spread its power all over the world. It is proved that globalisation has a significant impact on the economy which enhances the wealth from finance, investment, as well as trade.
2. Some economists argue that the emergence of fast rising and transformed foreign direct investment (FDI) have contributed both developed and developing countries to double-digit economic growth (Sassen, 2000).
3. Multinational corporations have played an important role in these global investments. The World Trade Organisation (WTO) has proclaimed that there is “a dramatic and continues growth of world trade”, which relatives to the growth in global output by multinational corporations in the economic activity (David, 2000).
4. What’s more, with the emergence of the formation of a global economy, new productivity sources, as well as new organizational forms, new information and communication technologies are forced to be created and spread as “the roots of globalisation development” (Manuel, 1998).
5. Furthermore, global ideas and information are spreading through the world, promoting global understanding and tolerance, stimulating the world to enter into a "global culture" (Aharoni, 2008).
6. The culture of globalization pervades our steps to life following simultaneous communication, ideas, information as well as languages through Internet, television, trade and tourism in the process.
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